写了一份英文简历,大家帮看看有没有什么词法语法错误?
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2002年12月21日 19:44:26
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School of Civil EngineeringXXXX University of TechnologyXXXX,XXXX,ChinaDec 21,2002Dept. of Human ResourcesXXXX Water CompanyXXXX,XXXX, ChinaDear Sir, I am writing in response to obtain a challenging position as a software/network/water supply/water treatment engineer with an emphasis in design and development. Next year I will receive a bachelor’s degree in water supply engineering. I believe that both my education and experience are directly related to your needs.

School of Civil Engineering
XXXX University of Technology
XXXX,XXXX,China
Dec 21,2002

Dept. of Human Resources
XXXX Water Company
XXXX,XXXX, China


Dear Sir,

I am writing in response to obtain a challenging position as a software/network/water supply/water treatment engineer with an emphasis in design and development. Next year I will receive a bachelor’s degree in water supply engineering. I believe that both my education and experience are directly related to your needs.

As an undergraduate, I have taken all the academic main courses and gain a great deal of practical expertise, I have finished the program of “Pineline Adjustment by Parameters” and “AGA”(Accelerated Genetic Algorithm). As a result, I can, at this point, perform most professional works with little or no difficulty.

Because my primary interest is in software and network development, besides taking courses of my major, I have taken many computer science courses such as Discrete Mathematic, Operation System, Data Structure etc. Nowaday, I can master various kinds of developer tools likes DELPHI, VASUAL BASIC, VASUAL C++ etc. I am familiar with several programming languages, for instance, C, C++, PHP, PASCAL, VB, FORTRAN and so on. I also have some development experience under UNIX and Linux environment. To be one of the main founders of XXX, I have been taking the main task of technology development and support.

I would appreciate the opportunity to join your staff because your firm enjoys a reputation for helping students like me to exert ones strong suit in water supply fields. I enclose a resume and could be available for an interview at your convenience.


Sincerely yours,
XXXX
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wuhao2002
2002年12月25日 17:13:03
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Simple grammer and short sentence.
You should express your meaning as clear as you can do to avoid other`s misunderstanding.
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david_hh
2002年12月29日 15:40:05
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your personal application seems to be too complicated. you should just introduced yourself in some aspects that is useful in the company.And the
interviewers will not like those who have many abilities but not good at one!!!
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wuhao2001
2003年04月29日 15:50:40
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Dear Madam or Sir:
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baggio
2003年05月05日 14:41:51
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wonderful!!
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liwh
2003年05月06日 16:01:19
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网上有现成的求职模板,可以拿来参考
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mechine
2003年05月09日 08:49:03
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so so... :)
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renfangliang
2003年12月19日 09:34:43
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in response to 我觉得用的不好!不如改成in the hope of可能说的不好你自己看
还有我觉得你说你会很多语言没什么用的,不如描述你CAD14/CAD200水平.
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xyb-1999
2003年12月19日 10:24:07
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wonderful.you may be interesting in teaching.you will receive success.i hope you will looking for a good job
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qcwu
2003年12月21日 13:42:13
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第九行中的Nowaday用Nowadays合一些
第三段中加在一个别and就更完整VASUAL BASIC, and VASUAL C++ etc
第二段中As an undergraduate, I have taken all the academic main courses and gain a great deal of practical expertise, 这句后面用分号更好!
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qcwu
2003年12月21日 13:46:43
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结束不应有中Sincerely yours, 的逗号
我还觉得删去yours更地到一点呵
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